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| Do you like my fluff? (pls read below first and honest answers are appreciated) |
| Yes, continue in that direction |
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50% |
[ 18 ] |
| No, your a tard |
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11% |
[ 4 ] |
| Nobody cares especially not me! |
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38% |
[ 14 ] |
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| Total Votes : 36 |
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Slick
Joined: Jul 03, 2004
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Oct 06, 2005 - 15:01 |
 
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I haven't done the players individual bios yet, but i was hoping you guys could tell me if I'm going in a good/pathetic direction.
Slick's Wrath
EDIT: I've now made this team/fluff also and I like it much more.
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It's not quite complete but it was fun to write.
Also if you think it's crap please take the time to tell me why? |
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SnakeSanders
Joined: Aug 02, 2003
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Oct 06, 2005 - 15:07 |
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It looks cool Slick, nice effort!
For me, personally, I prefer sports type comic BB fluff to WFB fluff
Some shameless self team promotion, but take a look at my skaven team the Cold Peak Warphunters. I still need to write in a few more team awards! |
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Slick
Joined: Jul 03, 2004
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Oct 06, 2005 - 15:10 |
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Good stuff man, and I plan to add some sport stuff based on their performance. However, this team was not created for fun and laughs. It was made when I was extremely POed. |
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JanMattys
Joined: Feb 29, 2004
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Oct 06, 2005 - 15:20 |
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I personally don't like it much. I find it a bit too ordinary.
I mean... What's so special about this team? Find something unique! "They are the strongest and most evil Dark Elves Slick could find" is not enough, imho.
(adding stuff based on their performance would help in this matter, I guess... It could even give you a hint about developing personal add ons for Stars you develop)
You asked to be honest, right?
I like the effort, but I think you must work on it some more. |
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SnakeSanders
Joined: Aug 02, 2003
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Oct 06, 2005 - 15:28 |
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Mine are a serious team too, but in a comic way, the way BB should be!
What do you think of my Skaven bio Jan? I wont be able to leave until i know an answer! |
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Slick
Joined: Jul 03, 2004
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Oct 06, 2005 - 15:29 |
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Constructive criticism is much appreciated JanMattys. This is my first time writing any fluff so I figured it might suck a bit.  Also I plan on adding a paragraph once I buy WEs and getting more into why I call them the Wrath. |
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Slick
Joined: Jul 03, 2004
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Oct 06, 2005 - 15:46 |
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Biggity, biggity, BUMP! |
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Warmduscher
Joined: Jun 15, 2005
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Oct 06, 2005 - 16:04 |
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He, then I'll give you my fluff for your criticism too: Chaos Avatars |
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Chainsaw
Joined: Aug 31, 2005
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Oct 06, 2005 - 16:09 |
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I'd actually say it's too long. I get a few words into each paragraph and my mind says, "Skip to the next one."
Personally I think you over elaborate on how the team is found. "In the mountains... blah blah... In the forest... blah blah... In the city... blah blah."
Pick one. One paragraph instead of three will make the fluff much less fluffy and give it, ironically, more substance. |
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Slick
Joined: Jul 03, 2004
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Oct 07, 2005 - 08:39 |
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I'll just bump this one more time to see if I can get a little more info. |
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DonKosak
Joined: Apr 06, 2004
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Oct 07, 2005 - 09:19 |
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| JanMattys wrote: | I personally don't like it much. I find it a bit too ordinary.
I mean... What's so special about this team? Find something unique! "They are the strongest and most evil Dark Elves Slick could find" is not enough, imho.
(adding stuff based on their performance would help in this matter, I guess... It could even give you a hint about developing personal add ons for Stars you develop) |
My words exactly...
Fluff is interesting if it's unique - if not it's just... well.... fluffy fluff.... 
We all know the first background story we made for our first D&D-character:
"My family was killed when orcs razed our city, and now I am an adventurer who hates orcs"....
As all bloodbowl teams' starting point is the same and most skill combinations have been seen before, you gotta find an approach to the fluff that'll make the team something we have never heard of before.
The easiest way to do this imho is to make up something extremely crazy - a funny story of some kind and then twist it to suit your team.
I made No Silly Ogres and Wood Food Poetry Book that way. Finding a "mission" for your team other than winning a lot of games helps a lot too.
But you can make the team interesting and unique in many different ways. Write serious fluff, write funny fluff, make some fancy graphics, make statistics on your players' perfomance, distribute medals like JanMattys does, hire a unusual combination of players (an all hobgob or zombie team for instance) - there are lots of possibilities. |
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AFK_Eagle
Joined: Mar 12, 2004
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Oct 07, 2005 - 17:40 |
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Just don't do too much...when your team bio starts to read like a novel (and takes just as long) you turn off prospective opponents from reading in the first place. That's what I was starting to get with my Weapon Masters...after 175 games of slowly adding material, it was just too long to read, even for me! So I cut out 95% of it, and plan on redoing some of the fluff story...
For example, Slick, I think you wrote some terrific stuff, but I'd slide some of it into player bios instead of the team bio...tell us in the team bio that you went to the forrests, the mountains, etc, and then in the player bio let us know this guy came from the forrest and was convinced to join the team because of the stories of slaughter or whatnot.
Brownrob, I love adding stats of player performances to your team bio, but I think you're being overly ambitious adding rushing squares, number of passes/blocks, etc, as these numbers will get ridiculous if the team lasts a while (imagine the stats for some of my players who've lasted 100+ games with my rats! 8-0 ). So I'd shorten it down to just listing average pass/rush/block/foul per game, showing who's the most active of your guys. (Hope you're keeping an excel sheet on the side for record keeping!) Keep up with the star player rolls and aging rolls...after 100 games, you'll be able to look back and complain with stats to back you up about how often you got screwed! lol
Warmduscher, I love it!
Wish I could figure out how to do in-bio tables like Jan's...
DonKosak, I object to the "Prince of Peace" allusion in your ogre team, but otherwise I was LMAO the entire read! |
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Chainsaw
Joined: Aug 31, 2005
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Oct 07, 2005 - 17:56 |
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AFK_Eagle: tables are easy. You can embed html in the team's bio.
<table> to start
<tr> to start a row
<th> for a table header
<td> for a cell
| Code: | <table>
<tr>
<th>Col Header 1</th>
<th>Col 2 Header</th>
</tr>
<tr>
<td>Cell 1, Row 1</td>
<td>Cell 2, Row 1</td>
</tr>
<tr>
<td>Cell 1, Row 2</td>
<td>Cell 2, Row 2</td>
</tr>
</table> |
Styling your table is a little tricker. Add style="property1:value1;property2:value2" attributes... you'll need to look at a CSS reference to get the properties.
e.g. <th style="background:black;color:white"> will start a column header which has a black background and white text. |
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Chainsaw
Joined: Aug 31, 2005
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Oct 07, 2005 - 17:58 |
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LordDanjel
Joined: Jul 31, 2004
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Oct 07, 2005 - 18:28 |
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Do you guys really have that much time to waste on these things?!
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